9.6.15

Melting

Candle flame flickers
with a breath of breeze
                               still burns bright
                                            diminishing 
              the starry lights.



Its existence, its essence
that keeps the flame
                   glowing and nourishing
                                              slowly melts.
in her hands.


21 comments:

  1. What a sweet poem but I wouldn't want a candle melting in my hand... ♡ xox

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  2. Like water only hot. Candlelight is poetry ignited.

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  3. There is a certain poignancy to this piece ... very beautiful :-)

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  4. First, candle wax can be so soothing.
    Second, it makes me think of how short we have.

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  5. You wove this one up with skill!

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  6. I wondering if you wrote the poem as a metaphor for her life ebbing away?

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  7. The burning candle measures out the time remaining.. a strong piece, and one of my favorites from you.

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  8. yeah, we do hold to some degree our passing life in our hands, the responsibility
    to shine as in our melting days in this life is to a large degree ours
    this is a lovely little Tuesday shrare, have a good day

    much love...

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  9. As the candlelight pales, it seems that somehow there is just the spirit left, symbolised by the wax.

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  10. Such an intense and beautiful poem this is.. :D
    Beautifully penned!

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  11. Slowly dying was a morbid feeling not knowing when! It heightened the urgency! Lovely take Vandana!

    Hank

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  12. Shining, burning, melting, slowly ebbing away..........yes, like life.

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  13. Your words turn the picture into an elevated piece of art.

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  14. Love this pic.The flame is worth the pain for some I suppose.

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  15. love how the picture complements the words

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  16. Love how the layout of the poem imitates the flickering of the candle

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  17. drip, drip, fizzle. I like this, I like the spacing of your words here, too.

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  18. I like the way the words seems to flicker across the page.

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  19. We are all candles...I too like the visual presentation of the piece. Beautiful

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  20. Wonderful~ I love how you layered your words-beautiful!

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