17.4.15

Love’s Shadow : Octelle



Love’s shadow holding a flower,
came to me from a place afar,
 had a magnificent charm,
feelings were all soft and warm.
But a gust of snowy breeze,
tossed it in eternal freeze.
Love’s shadow holding a flower,
came to me from a place afar.


















The Octelle: Consists of eight lines using personification and symbolism .Syllable : 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, and the rhyme scheme is aa/bb/cc/aa. The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.

26 comments:

  1. oh we have to be careful to shield love from the cold winds of life...

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  2. love's Shadow can't live long...nice personification...

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  3. Beautifully executed..! Loved the portrayal of your wisdom in this poem :)
    Lots of love
    xoxo

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  4. I think it is always nice to be surrounded by the shadow of love in one's life!

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  5. Love is like a flower which can bloom for long time but that can change in a instant when the warmth goes from a relationship.

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  6. Love's shadow is always in the background. One should be careful not to antagonize it lest it awakens! A short and sweet form. Good form to try, Vandana!

    Hank

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  7. I loved the form and oh those icy winds that freeze out love.

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  8. Love is like a tender spring flower.. Wonderful thoughts.

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  9. love the warmth it holds, despite the freezing grip.

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  10. I felt that frigid gust in my face... so sudden. Lovely form for this sentiment.

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  11. such a lovely use of the form!

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  12. Love's a shadow - it is sometimes a shadow and sometimes it is the light
    Your first two lines are strong and work well in the poem as they are repeated. I have not tried this form. Thanks for introducing me to it.

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  13. Omg...Such a beautiful piece.Made me hang to the last word, Vandana. 😊

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  14. Nicely realised Vandana - pretty much like the brief and perfect flowering you are describing.. A real treat to read - Thank you... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  15. Hold on. Never let go, don't let the wind take your precious gem :)

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  16. "Love’s shadow holding a flower" - lovely. And again, your facility with form is superb, Vandana.

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  17. Such an uncertain gift, easily blown by the wind! A mere shadow of the real thing ...

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  18. Sad when a passing breeze takes love away, sometimes we need to hold onto that flower a little tighter...
    Anna :o]

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  19. I wish you an eternal shadow of love.. Lovely write! :)

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  20. "eternal freeze"---oooh....that sends chills, for sure!!

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  21. I love the breezy feel of this...very uplifting

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  22. Vandana,

    A lovely style with which to express this poetic floral experience..Spring and its chilly surprises at times...

    Eileen

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  23. So true, but then we need to, at any cost, protect those soft, soothing components from all the prevailing harshness....Awesomely put!

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