16.10.14

Sun: Pleiades


Sun's ever burning flame,
smoulders on horizon,
sunrays kiss morning dew,
shinning white pearly hue,
soothing eyes, heart, mind, soul,
showering warmth, love, care,
soaring the skies high.


Pleiades: 7 line poem with 6 syllables per line. Title is of one word only. First letter of title and every line is the same.

34 comments:

  1. A good new form, good to try! Not too difficult it appears to be. The sun with all its goodness! Great lines Vandana!

    Hank

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  2. This is wonderful, Vandana. The sun's warmth brings joy to our days. Great prompt. I will be writing later today.

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  3. Such soaring, and smoothly spectacular sentences!

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  4. form & content both amazing Vandana...love how the sun is sketched as the symbol of warmth, love and joy...a beautiful write :)

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  5. The sun is ever showering us with warmth, love and care ~

    Hey, we both wrote the same star, smiles ~ Thanks for guest hosting today ~

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  6. wonderful.. I love the sun .. alas it's getting rare up in the north .. what a good challenge you give us.

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  7. the sun is a wonderful companion, sharing that warmth with us...it makes me feel alive when the first rays of spring caress my face....for a small form this was a bit challenging....just got mine done...and looking forward to you hosting...you will do a great job...smiles.

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  8. So much said in just a few lines....beautifully done!

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  9. Sometimes brevity leads to strict parameters, but I love the original essence of this form, before the syllable count was added; but this is an amazingly creative debut for you as guest host; welcome aboard, & may we see you there often.

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  10. You've chosen a lovely image to go with your poem. Thanks for this prompt, Vandana, a completely new form to me.

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  11. Your words are the perfect accompaniment for the image you chose for your topic, Vandana. Beautiful work and thank you for bringing us such a neat form and hosting, too. :)

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  12. Beautifully done and the image you chose is wonderful. Great prompt, kiddo!

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  13. Great way to start as a host, and I love the form for it's unique way of passing on a thought...

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  14. Oh, this is beautiful.I am trying to work up my courage to join in...lovely form...

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  15. Excellent use of form. I enjoyed doing it. Thanks for the prompt.

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  16. This is full of warmth and hope. I enjoyed this form it worked well. Thank you for hosting.

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  17. Loved this, especially the first two lines and the internal rhyme of 3 & 4. We need more smoldering heat! Nicely done.

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  18. I'll be honest I read your poem tonight before I set to work on my own. You set the poetic bar so high that I knew all that was left to do was have fun with the form. Thank you so much for teaching me this fun form.

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  19. I feel the peace in this, as though you were content as you were writing

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  20. I really enjoyed the form, Vandana--thank you! And yours is just lovely.

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  21. without sun where we will be?? nice lines that appreciate him..smiles..loved it

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  22. A lovely poem, though for some readon the typeface was not easy to read. I think my eyes are deranged!

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  23. Burning and calm and steady--a paradox explained only by distance--or we would know at once the origin of forest fires. Nicely done.

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  24. Your words are the embodiment of warmth!

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  25. nicely done... cool picture

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  26. Beautiful, and the picture you paired with it is also lovely.

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  27. This is beautiful! And I really like the way the name of the form makes your title look like "Sun Pleads," lending additional meaning to the poem.

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  28. Excellent tribute to the sun's effects.

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  29. Beautifully written - thanks for sharing this new form with us!

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  30. Thank you for the new form, Vandana...I loved your offering. And I apologize for the goof up by me...I'm usually more attentive when trying something new.

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  31. O god, I feel warmed up here, thanks Vandana! Beautiful poem, nice form, thanks!

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  32. Beautiful, warm as the sun, makes me feel good :)

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