11.10.14

Stars In The Ocean: Burns Stanza

Aquamarine transparent sea floor,
besprent with tiny shiny spores,
a marvel of nature to explore.
Blue silk waves black sky,
from the heaven pour.
Dance in rhythm, soar high.

 
Stars float all over,
another domain to flyover,
singing songs to a loner.
Bright glittery nano drops,
warm the ocean all so colder,
lovingly two different worlds hop.

The Burns stanza : Named after the Scottish poet Robert Burns. Also called the Scottish stanza or six-line stave. Prior to Burns’s use, it was known as the standard Habbie, after Habbie Simpson. Rhyme scheme: aaabab.





22 comments:

  1. Ah, the world of the sea and the world of the sky -- both beautiful, but different!

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  2. an exquisite image of the sea as the mirror holding the infinite...."Blue silk waves black sky, / from the heaven pour." and "Stars float all over," are my fav. images...

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  3. nice.... love the magic the little stars bring to the sea...it's like little kisses

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  4. Sea and sky such strangers to each other yet constantly touching, kissing and wondering.

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  5. Beautiful lines, Vanadana. I particularly like the second stanza.

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  6. love the dance of the light on the water...the shine rising and falling on the waves...

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  7. Hopping away! Lovely way to celebrate each other. Nothing more beautiful than this union.

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  8. I love the blue silk waves, the black sky and the floating stars....beautiful photo, which you have interpreted well!

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  9. Lovely writing here. I love how you distinguish yet connect the sea and the sky and I felt happy about their hoping around. Love this.

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  10. Adding a little magic to a dark sea :) I love this poetry form :)

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  11. amazing poem even better the poem!! beautiful!!

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  12. Somehow when the moon lends its silver to the sea, that road across has to lead somewhere..

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  13. What a wonderful image...it just filled my heart with warmth and joy... :-)

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  14. I love when the stars come down to greet us… beautiful Vandana!

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  15. I love it when the sun shines on the water creating little stars ~ such lovely imagery & rhymes.

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  16. It is such a dance of sea, land, and air. Well written poem.

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  17. blue silk waves..lovely image..the pic is amazing..

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  18. Two worlds myriad reflections and sources of much inspiration. Like your imagery and sharing of new (to me) poetic forms.

    Elizabeth

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  19. I like how these two play off of each other....reflecting perfectly.... Lovely.

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