4.6.14

A Secret Garden: Canzonet

My heart is a garden,
a secret flower grows there,
away from prying eyes so hardened.
Its seeds sprinkled from somewhere.
Going down the memory lane,
I remember your glimpse,
how your smile brings rain,
leaving on my heart your love’s imprints.

Every day I water this flower,
with dreams of tomorrow,
thinking about us wherever we are,
only hope as my guide to follow.
You’ll never know about my love’s riddle,
Or my heart skipping a beat with your glimpse,
Or turning my soul’s sea with a ripple,
leaving on my heart your love’s imprints.
The Canzonet is a lyric poem of varying line length and metrical patterns. It consists of at least two octaves, and each octave uses a series of alternating couplets. The last line or last phrase is repeated in each stanza of the subsequent stanzas. The rhyme scheme is thus:a. b. a. b. c. d. c. D. 

24 comments:

  1. oh but you should tell them your loves riddle and how it ripples...
    what a hard thing to carry ever unfulfilled...its good to know how our love
    touches another...

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  2. You are so clever with forms and this one suits your love poem This is another form I have not tried.
    Very nice. I enjoyed this.

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  3. Just testing to see if you got my comment. Lovely !

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  4. "how your smile brings rain," I love the ambiguity of this line (and of the entire poem). How I can't be sure if the rain is the kiss of life that makes the flower grow... Or the killing storm that rips petals, leaving the bloom scarred.

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  5. A very romantic expression of emotion.

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  6. This holds a classic love poem sentiment...beautiful.

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  7. Ah Vandana. The last two lines took it away. Beautiful :)

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  8. You follow the form and flow so carefully!

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  9. So nice that you found me and I found you as I am truly enjoying your poetry.
    Beautifully expressed ...

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  10. Interesting form and, though your heart is a garden you give us glimpses of its beauty through your poetry.

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  11. A beautiful glimpse into a woman's heart, and your form is amazing. :-)

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  12. A lovely form that you use so well ! Thanks. K.

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  13. Oh, Vandana! I love the poem, the form, the rhymes, flowing lines , Canzonet ...thanks for sharing your 'love's riddle' ... (as you said). :)xx

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  14. this is lovely secret............fine!

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  15. I adore the image of the heart being a garden where a secret flower grows..nurture that flower my friend and it will bloom deep within your soul.

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  16. 'Dreams of tomorrow with hope as your guide' can't get any more perfect than that!

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  17. I am always impressed when someone can do a form so beautifully. I love the first line and am intrigued by "Its seeds sprinkled from somewhere."

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  18. I really like "turning my soul’s sea with a ripple"...beautiful imagery!

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  19. This is very nice, form and content. It is good to have a secret garden in the heart - there is a well spring of hope when times are tough. :-) thanks for sharing the form, too.

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  20. I love the opening line, my heart is a garden ~

    What a challenging form & you do so well with the rhyming pattern ~ Have a lovely weekend ~

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  21. Secret love can be painful. I like the secret garend metahor. My favorite lines are:

    I remember your glimpse,
    how your smile brings rain,

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  22. Beautiful. Love the rhymes. :)

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  24. Beautiful Canzonet, Vandana. I must try writing one, some day. I might add, I find your process notes to be most edifying. Thank you.

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