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Night Queen : Terzanelle

Stepping on stars,
she waves her black hair,
and opens her shiny jars.

Descending down stair,
murmuring songs in peace,
she waves her black hair.

With heaven and earth at ease,
basking under night’s glory,
murmuring songs in peace.

Night moon visualizing this story,
dancing along warm breeze,
basking under night’s glory.

Moon rays shimmering, absorbing freeze,
tripping on waves,
dancing along warm breeze.

Night queen brightens dark caves,
stepping on stars,
tripping on waves,
and opens her shiny jars.

A terzanelle  is a poetry form which is a combination of the villanelle and the terza rima. It is nineteen lines total, with five triplets and a concluding quatrain. 

16 comments:

  1. I've never heard of a terzanelle format, but I really like it. Nice poem!

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  2. This is beautiful Vandana! Never seen it before! It blends very well with the leisurely pace of a peaceful night. Great!

    Hank

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  3. This looks like to write, Vandana, keeping it with the form. I hadn't know of the terzanelle but if I had can remember it I might try sometime. I like the idea of tripping on the waves and stepping on stars. I don't think it would slow down progress much, it sounds delightful.
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  4. Wow this is awesome :) never seen this type of poem before, plus I love the whole "stepping on stars" element especially with the photo!

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  5. Beautiful imagery. :-)
    -HA

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  6. You are getting good using all these forms. Think I will trip along with the stars, enjoy your poem, and not try this form.

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  7. Oh.. I really like the way you took the terzanelle.. very nice

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  8. So beautiful..love the form

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  9. Love the write and the form. So beautiful in its imagery.

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  10. this is just beautiful...so much detail, love the accompanying artwork as well...splendid work!

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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  11. This is pretty amazing ... a difficult form which you mastered.

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  12. This is beautiful Vandana....and nice use of the difficult form....

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  13. Perfectly conceived: a fairy tale and this complex form go together beautifully

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